How can I improve my college application essay?
The most important thing, which changes it all, is giving an actual example.
Writing “in general” without giving specific example from life to support your inferences is a serious blander for an application essay.
It is important to describe how exactly you felt during the experience you describe and what it made you understand or how it affected your future. These tips relate to any prompt you choose.
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